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ZIM

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Dưới đây là tổng hợp đề thi IELTS Writing thực tế đã ra trong tháng 1/2021. Các bạn đăng nhập để làm bài phía bên dưới nhé. Các admin sẽ nhận xét bài viết cho các bạn.

Đề thi IELTS Writing ngày 20/02

  • Task 1: Bar chart
  • Task 2: Some people say free time activities for children should be organized by parents. Others say that children should be free to choose what they do in their free time. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Đề thi IELTS Writing ngày 06/02

  • Task 1: The bar chart shows the percentage of small , medium, large companies which used social media for business purposes between 2012 to 2016.
de-thi-ielts-writitng-task-1-ngay-06022021.png
  • Task 2: Many people believe that it is easier to have a healthy lifestyle in the countryside. Other believe that there are health benefits of living in cities. Discuss both views and give your opinions
 
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Susan

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Today, the question of whether residing in rural areas or urban ones would bring people a healthy lifestyle has sparked a controversy. This essay will discuss both sides of the argument in detail and provide evidences as why residents in big cities would get better healthcare.

There are some reasons why some hold the view of living in rural areas is better for our health. First, since countryside have more spacious places but less population, residents’ living environment can be ensured. In fact, the number of people residing in rural areas is much lower than that of big cities, so places like forests and fields would be utilized to provide such a green space with fresh air. This is beneficial for residents’ physical and mental health. Second, if people choose to live in small villages, they can distance themselves from hectic schedules of work and study which are common when it comes to working in metropolises. Village dwellers would find time to prepare food or even grow vegetables and fruits for their daily meals instead of picking up from convenience stores. In this way, not only their health is ensured but also their life is much more balanced.

However, I would argue that city dwellers are provided with many healthcare advantages. First, it is easier to find hospitals with advanced medical facilities where they can be treated carefully. Additionally, people would get to be cared by well-trained and experienced practitioners which cannot be found in rural regions. Second, if there was an emergency or a complicated case which local doctors cannot deal with, it would take patients few hours or even few days to be transferred from local clinics to advanced hospitals in big cities. This would put patients’ lives in danger.

In conclusion, both kinds of living environment have their own benefits. By considering all the pros and cons, people would choose the suitable place to reside.

Rất mong nhận được feedback từ ad cho đề mới ngày hôm nay ạ, Em cảm ơn team Zim rất nhiều ạ.
 
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Dinh Cong Anh

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It is thought by some that it would be better for people to live in urban areas as a way to lead a healthy lifestyle. While this could be true to a certain extent, I am of the view that living in rural areas also bring many health benefits to people.

There are two main reasons related to health why people should attach great significance to becoming city dwellers. The most visible would be that in doing so, they can have more opportunities to approach the up-to-date healthcare systems, that have an important role to play in dealing with various diseases such as cancer or pandemics in this day and age. In addition, private-owned enterprises tend to invest in building fitness facilities like gym rooms in cities. As a result, people can find it easier than ever for them to work out at the gym on a regular basis with a view to maintaining a healthy body and a healthy mind.

However, in my view, the upsides of living in the countryside should not be overlooked for several factors. From a catering perspective, it would be more beneficial for rural residents who live in such places to have the chance to enjoy healthy diets with fresh fruits and vegetables. By contrast, before being transported to cities, these kinds of agricultural products are more likely to be sprayed with toxic chemicals in order to keep their quality, which could have an adverse impact on the health of those living in the cityside. From an environmental perspective, people who opt to settle in the countryside are able to stay away from air pollution, which could be a huge issue that urban dwellers are struggling with on a daily basis. This, therefore, would help them to get fit and trim in the long run.

In conclusion, even though I do not deny the health benefits that urban citizens have, I still believe that those who are living in rural areas also gain certain merits for their health.
Thanks, Zim for this.
 

Dinh Cong Anh

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Task 1: The graph gives data about the proportion of enterprises with three different sizes in terms of the use of social media to do business over a period of 4 years.

It is noticeable that apart from the figure for large companies, others saw an increase in the percentage of companies using social networks over the period shown. Moreover, the proportion of large companies that employed social media for business purposes was highest in all years.

From the graph, we can see that there was a significant rise in the figure for social media usage of small businesses from around 27% in 2012 to nearly 50% in 2016, despite a small decrease in 2015. Also, in 2012, just a little over 30% of medium companies used social networking sites in the business, and this number rose quickly to around 48% in 2014, but it suddenly declined by around 18% 1 year later, and then went up to around 53% by the of the period.

By contrast, this number of large companies remained relatively stable over the first three years, at around 78%. However, it also went down to 54% in 2015, before recovering to just under 80% by 2016.
 

Susan

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The bar chart illustrates the use of social platforms in three different kinds of businesses from 2013 to 2016.

Overall, it is clear that using social media for trading purposes became more and more popular among all types of companies. Additionally, the large organizations were by far the top social network users.

Looking at the first two data sets, in 2012 the percentage of small businesses accessing to social media was the least, at 26%, which was 5% lower than that of medium ones. Two years later, these figures increased to nearly 35% and 45%, respectively. However, in the year of 2015, the rate of social media usage in these companies decreased to exact 30% before climbing again to around 45% by 2016.

Turning to large-sized businesses, in the first three years of the period given, about 76% of these enterprises made a good use of internet platforms for commercial purposes. In 2015, like other businesses, big companies showed a significant decline of 24%. At the end of the period, its figure made a recovery and rose up to approximately 80%, keeping them the top position in using social media
 

Vu Trong Hieu

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Today, the question of whether residing in rural areas or urban ones would bring people a healthy lifestyle has sparked a controversy. This essay will discuss both sides of the argument in detail and provide evidences as why residents in big cities would get better healthcare.

There are some reasons why some hold the view of (that) living in rural areas is better for our health. First, since countryside have more spacious places but less population, residents’ living environment can be ensured. In fact, the number of people residing in rural areas is much lower than that of big cities, so places like forests and fields would be utilized to provide such a green space with fresh air. This is beneficial for residents’ physical and mental health. Second, if people choose to live in small villages, they can distance themselves from hectic schedules of work and study which are common when it comes to working in metropolises. (mình thấy mối liên quan giữa kích cỡ của làng với độ bận rộn của một người là không rõ ràng lắm bạn nhé. Một người có thể sống ở ngôi làng nhỏ nhưng vẫn làm việc bận rộn được, vì họ làm online hoặc đi làm ở thành phố và sống ở làng nhỏ này thoi) Village dwellers would find time to prepare food or even grow vegetables and fruits for their daily meals instead of picking up from convenience stores. In this way, not only their health is ensured but also their life is much more balanced.

However, I would argue that city dwellers are provided with many healthcare advantages. First, it is easier to find hospitals with advanced medical facilities where they can be treated carefully. Additionally, people would get to be cared by well-trained and experienced practitioners which cannot be found in rural regions. Second, if there was an emergency or a complicated case which local doctors cannot deal with, it would take patients few hours or even few days to be transferred from local clinics to advanced hospitals in big cities. This would put patients’ lives in danger (phần này thì mình thấy bạn chưa làm rõ được mối liên quan giữa cái này với LỐI SỐNG lành mạnh bạn nhé, vì mình thấy ở đây chỉ là các trường hợp hiếm gặp, chứ không phải là cái mà có liên quan tới một lối sống duy trì dài bạn nhé).

In conclusion, both kinds of living environment have their own benefits. By considering all the pros and cons, people would choose the suitable place to reside.
Phần bài của bạn Susan mình thấy có thể đạt được band điểm 7.0 bạn nhé. Trong bài của bạn hầu như không mắc lỗi ngữ pháp nào, và bạn cũng đã sử dụng khá đa dạng và chính xác các từ vựng khác nhau. Các thông tin trong bài của bạn cũng đã có sự gắn kết khá chặt chẽ qua việc sử dụng từ nối và cấu trúc nối khá linh hoạt. Tuy nhiên thì có một vài ý nhỏ bạn vẫn chưa làm rõ cho lắm. Bạn nên cải thiện lại các ý này để bài viết mang tính thuyết phục hơn bạn nhé.

The bar chart illustrates the use of social platforms in three different kinds of businesses from 2013 to 2016.

Overall, it is clear that using social media for trading purposes became more and more popular among all types of companies. Additionally, the large organizations were by far the top social network users.

Looking at the first two data sets, in 2012 the percentage of small businesses accessing to social media was the least, at 26%, which was 5% lower than that of medium ones. Two years later, these figures increased to nearly 35% and 45%, respectively. However, in the year of 2015, the rate of social media usage in these companies (các đối tượng trong bài không phải là companies mà là các LOẠI companies khác nhau bạn nhé) decreased to exact 30% before climbing again to around 45% by 2016.

Turning to large-sized businesses, in the first three years of the period given, about 76% of these enterprises made a good use of internet platforms for commercial purposes. In 2015, like other businesses, big companies showed a significant decline of 24%. At the end of the period, its figure made a recovery and rose up to approximately 80%, keeping them the top position in using social media
Phần bài viết này của bạn mình thấy cũng có thể đạt được band điểm 7.0 bạn nhé. Hầu hết các phản hồi của mình về ngữ pháp và từ vựng ở trên đều áp dụng cho phần bài viết này của bạn nhé. Ngoài ra thì mình không có bình luận nào khác.

Xin chúc bạn Susan làm bài thành công trong tương lai bạn nhé!
 

Vu Trong Hieu

Moderator
It is thought by some that it would be better for people to live in urban areas as a way to lead a healthy lifestyle. While this could be true to a certain extent, I am of the view that living in rural areas also bring many health benefits to people.

There are two main reasons related to health why people should attach great significance to becoming city dwellers. The most visible would be that in doing so, they can have more opportunities to approach the up-to-date healthcare systems, that have an important role to play in dealing with various diseases such as cancer or pandemics in this day and age (ý này còn chưa liên quan lắm tới nội dung chính của bài là HEALTHY LIFESTYLE bạn nhé). In addition, private-owned enterprises tend to invest in building fitness facilities like gym rooms in cities. As a result, people can find it easier than ever for them to work out at the gym on a regular basis with a view to maintaining a healthy body and a healthy mind.

However, in my view, the upsides of living in the countryside should not be overlooked for several factors. From a catering perspective, it would be more beneficial for rural residents who live in such places to have the chance to enjoy healthy diets with fresh fruits and vegetables. By contrast, before being transported to cities, these kinds of agricultural products are more likely to be sprayed with toxic chemicals in order to keep their quality, which could have an adverse impact on the health of those living in the cityside. From an environmental perspective, people who opt to settle in the countryside are able to stay away from air pollution, which could be a huge issue that urban dwellers are struggling (might struggle) with on a daily basis. This, therefore, would help them to get fit and trim in the long run.

In conclusion, even though I do not deny the health benefits that urban citizens have, I still believe that those who are living in rural areas also gain certain merits for their health.
Phần bài viết này của bạn Cong Anh mình thấy đã có thể đạt được band điểm 7.0 bạn nhé. Bài của bạn đã sử dụng nhiều cấu trúc ngữ pháp và từ vựng một cách chính xác và linh hoạt. Các ý của bạn cũng đã có liên quan khá chặt chẽ tới yêu cầu đề bài, và đã được liên kết với nhau một cách dễ hiểu và rõ ràng bạn nhé.
Task 1: The graph gives data about the proportion of enterprises with three different sizes in terms of the use of social media to do business over a period of 4 years.

It is noticeable that apart from the figure for large companies, others saw an increase in the percentage of companies using social networks over the period shown. Moreover, the proportion of large companies that employed social media for business purposes was highest in all years.

From the graph, we can see that there was a significant rise in the figure for social media usage of small businesses from around 27% in 2012 to nearly 50% in 2016, despite a small decrease in 2015. Also, in 2012, just a little over 30% of medium companies used social networking sites in the business, and this number rose quickly to around 48% in 2014, but it suddenly declined by around 18% 1 year later, and then went up to around 53% by the of the period.

By contrast, this number of large companies remained relatively stable over the first three years, at around 78%. However, it also went down to 54% in 2015, before recovering to just under 80% by 2016.
Phần Task 1 của bạn thì theo mình chỉ có thể đạt được band điểm là 6.5 thôi bạn nhé. Dù trong phần bài của bạn không có lỗi ngữ pháp hoặc lỗi dùng từ quá nghiêm trọng nào, nhưng các cách bạn miêu tả thông tin trong 2 đoạn thân bài vẫn còn khá máy móc, và chưa thực sự có sự so sánh và đối chiếu giữa các luồng thông tin khác nhau bạn nhé.

Xin chúc bạn Cong Anh làm bài thành công bạn nhé!
 

littlebird123

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Nếu có thể thì mong ad xem qua hộ e bài này với ạ.


Task 1

The bar chart illustrates the percentage of companies from small, medium to large which used social media in order to serve business purposes in a period of 4 years from 2012 to 2016.

Overall, what can be inferred from that chart is that the bigger a business was to more usages there were to social media. Moreover, the presence of social media in large enterprises remained stable at about 80% over years, whereas it increased steadily in small and medium ones.

Despite mentioning above that the 2 figures in small and medium businesses climbed over the given period, drops were witnessed in 2015. Though it was only an insignificant drop for small businesses from around a third to roughly 30%, the drop was remarkable for medium ones as it felt from almost a half to approximately 30% as well. However, the numbers increased rapidly in the following year as it reached almost 50% for small enterprises and just over 50% for medium ones. The access of social media in big businesses also decreased down to just above 50%, the number continued to caught up with the original numbers at 80% in 2016

Task 2

It is a belief of many people that the healthy lifestyle is more achievable than it is in cities. Others claim that there are many health-relating advantages of living in a city. This essay’s aim is to discuss both views as well as to show my inclination.

On the one hand, it is the facilities that make a healthy lifestyle achievable in the city life. The numerous of hospitals and fitness centers are the main reason why people in big cities could keep up a healthy lifestyle. For example, people can easily get regular medical checkups as well as diagnosed with potential diseases extremely fast, whereas people in the country side have difficult times getting access to medical services. Additionally, due to the significant grow of fitness centers and gyms in large cities, people can remain and motivated to stay in good health condition easier more than ever.

On the other hand, one of the biggest benefits of living in the rural countryside is the environment. To be more specific, not only water sources that are pure and great in quality, the clean air also contributes to why it is easy to stay healthy in the countryside, in opposed to the extremely polluted environment in cities. For example, most people living in crowded cities have to wear facemasks whenever going outside if they want to keep their lungs healthy. Moreover, the food is usually homegrown or come from reliable sources that make the countryside so ideal for keeping fit. For instance, since the majority of people living in the countryside are farmers, clean vegetables and meat will never be in a shortage condition. As a result, food poisoning or health problems are rarely witnessed in the rural areas.

In conclusion, I believe that a healthy lifestyle could be achievable anywhere as long as one is determined enough.

Cám ơn các ad đáng yêu!
 

Sarwar

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Dưới đây là tổng hợp đề thi IELTS Writing thực tế đã ra trong tháng 1/2021. Các bạn đăng nhập để làm bài phía bên dưới nhé. Các admin sẽ nhận xét bài viết cho các bạn.

Đề thi IELTS Writing ngày 06/02

  • Task 1: The bar chart shows the percentage of small , medium, large companies which used social media for business purposes between 2012 to 2016.
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  • Task 2: Many people believe that it is easier to have a healthy lifestyle in the countryside. Other believe that there are health benefits of living in cities. Discuss both views and give your opinions
 

Susan

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task 2 (20/2)
The question whether recreation activities should be selected by parents or by kids themselves has sparked a controversy. Both sides of this argument will be discussed and give evidence why I suppose children have a right to do whatever they want in their spare time.

One the one hand, there are several reasons why some think that parents should set up leisure time activities for kids. First, kids especially those at the young age are vulnerable, they are not aware of dangers when participating in indoor or outdoor activities. In fact, some outside games like swimming and hiking could cause physical injuries for young participants. Therefore, parents with practical experience and knowledge can play a role as mentors helping their offspring choose the right games with safe playgrounds and prevent them from unexpected damage.

However, I would argue that children should be free to have fun activities themselves. First, since academic subjects at school are mostly picked by parents, it is a good idea if kids can choose what they do for fun after school. In fact, doing what they enjoy is the great way to recharge their battery and reduce stress after long nerve-racking days. Some would even expand their social circle by meeting and sharing the same interests with their peers. Beside, being controlled by parents somehow can be detrimental to kids’ feelings. Many of them would feel irritated and stressful with this strict monitoring, leading to negative attitude and bad behavior in the long run.

In conclusion, although parental guidance in activities outside of school could protect children from potential threat, I believe that kids can be happier if they do what they truly enjoy.

Mình rất cảm ơn feedback của Ad với 2 bài essays ngày 6/2 ạ. Rất mong tiếp tục nhận được phản hồi cho đề mới hôm nay ạ.
 

Vu Trong Hieu

Moderator
Nếu có thể thì mong ad xem qua hộ e bài này với ạ.


Task 1

The bar chart illustrates the percentage of companies from small, medium to large which used social media in order to serve business purposes in a period of 4 years from 2012 to 2016.

Overall, what can be inferred from that chart is that the bigger a business was t, the more likely it is usages there were to to use social media. Moreover, the presence of social media in large enterprises remained stable at about 80% over years (bạn không được phép thêm số liệu cụ thể vào trong phần overview bạn nhé), whereas it increased steadily in small and medium ones.

Despite mentioning above that the 2 figures in small and medium businesses climbed over the given period, drops were witnessed in 2015 (bạn chưa nói tới xuất phát điểm của hai số liệu này nên có thể khiến người đọc khó theo dõi thông tin bạn nhé). Though it was only an insignificant drop for small businesses from around a third to roughly 30% (vào năm bao nhiêu?), the drop was remarkable for medium ones as it felt from almost a half to approximately 30% as well. However, the numbers increased rapidly in the following year as it reached almost 50% for small enterprises and just over 50% for medium ones. The access of social media in big businesses also decreased down to just above 50% (vào năm bao nhiêu?), the number continued to caught up with the original numbers at 80% in 2016
Phần Task 1 của bạn littlebird mình thấy có thể đạt được band điểm 5.5-6 bạn nhé. Phần bài của bạn nói chung thì không sai quá nhiều về mặt ngữ pháp và từ vựng, tuy nhiên thì thông tin trong bài của bạn còn khá khó để hiểu vì việc miêu tả thông tin còn thiếu sót chi tiết quan trọng. Bạn nên cải thiện phần này để cải thiện band điểm của mình bạn nhé.
Task 2

It is a belief of many people that the healthy lifestyle is more achievable than it is in cities. Others claim that there are many health-related advantages of living in a city. This essay’s aim is to discuss both views as well as to show my inclination (opinion/view sẽ phù hợp hơn bạn nhé).

On the one hand, it is the facilities that make a healthy lifestyle achievable in the city life. The numerous of hospitals and fitness centers are the main reason why people in big cities could keep up a healthy lifestyle. For example, people can easily get regular medical checkups as well as being diagnosed with potential diseases extremely fast, whereas people in the country side have difficulties times getting access to medical services. Additionally, due to the significant grow of fitness centers and gyms in large cities, people can remain and motivated to stay in good health condition easier more than ever.

On the other hand, one of the biggest benefits of living in the rural countryside is the environment. To be more specific, not only water sources that are pure and great in quality, the clean air also contributes to why it is easy to stay healthy in the countryside, in(as) opposed to the extremely polluted environment in cities. For example, most people living in crowded cities have to wear facemasks whenever going outside if they want to keep their lungs healthy (phần ví dụ này minh hoạ chưa rõ bạn nhé, vì câu trước bạn có viết là nước ở miền quê trong sạch và không khí trong lành, nhưng ở ví dụ bạn chỉ nói tới không khí. Hơn nữa thì việc bạn nói tới không khí ở câu này chưa rõ ràng và chưa thể hiện rõ được là việc đeo khẩu trang này là để chống không khí bẩn). Moreover, the food is usually homegrown or come from reliable sources that make the countryside so ideal for keeping fit. For instance, since the majority of people living in the countryside are farmers, clean vegetables and meat will never be in a shortage condition (short supply). As a result, food poisoning or health problems are rarely witnessed in the rural areas.

In conclusion, I believe that a healthy lifestyle could be achievable anywhere as long as one is determined enough.
Về phần bài Task 2 thì mình thấy bài viết của bạn có thể đạt được điểm 6.5 bạn nhé. Phần bài của bạn nói chung không gặp quá nhiều vấn đề về ngữ pháp và từ vựng (nếu có thì không ảnh hưởng nhiều đến nghĩa). Tuy nhiên thì bạn nên chú ý một chút trong việc đảm bảo ví dụ của mình có liên quan và được diễn tả một cách rõ ràng hơn bạn nhé!
 

Vu Trong Hieu

Moderator
task 2 (20/2)
The question whether recreation activities should be selected by parents or by kids themselves has sparked a controversy. Both sides of this argument will be discussed and give evidence why I suppose children have a right to do whatever they want in their spare time.

One the one hand, there are several reasons why some think that parents should set up leisure time activities for kids. First, kids especially those at the young age are vulnerable (phần này nên thêm từ nối bạn nhé, và ý vulnerable không liên quan lắm tới vế sau bạn nhé), they are not aware of dangers when participating in indoor or outdoor activities. In fact, some outside games like swimming and hiking could cause physical injuries for young participants. Therefore, parents with practical experience and knowledge can play a role as mentors helping their offspring choose the right games with safe playgrounds and prevent them from unexpected damage.

However, I would argue that children should be free to have fun activities themselves. First, since academic subjects at school are mostly picked by parents, it is a good idea if kids can choose what they do for fun after school. In fact, doing what they enjoy is the great way to recharge their battery and reduce stress after long nerve-racking days. Some would even expand their social circle by meeting and sharing the same interests with their peers. (Các ý này mình chưa thấy thực sự thuyết phục lắm, vì ý này chưa giải thích rõ được TẠI SAO trẻ em lại nên chọn hoạt động ngoại khoá bạn nhé) Beside, being controlled by parents somehow can be detrimental to kids’ feelings. Many of them would feel irritated and stressful with this strict monitoring, leading to negative attitude and bad behavior in the long run.

In conclusion, although parental guidance in activities outside of school could protect children from potential threat, I believe that kids can be happier if they do what they truly enjoy.
Phần bài viết của bạn susan mình thấy có thể đạt được band điểm 7.0 bạn nhé. Mình thấy phần bài viết của bạn hầu như đã chính xác hoàn toàn về mặt ngữ pháp và từ vựng, và cả hai đều cũng đã được sử dụng một cách khá linh hoạt. Vấn đề lớn nhất trong bài của bạn là về một số ý bạn đưa ra bạn nhé. Như mình đã giải thích ở trên thì các ý bạn đưa ra đôi khi không hoàn toàn phù hợp hoặc ăn khớp với nhau.

Bạn Susan nên chú ý hơn về việc này trong các bài viết sau để có thể đạt điểm cao hơn bạn nhé.
 
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